ok this first one is what i origanally started with... and the second is edited. i edited it past this, but let me know what you think.
Prologue
Lake Powell truly is my home away from home. It’s where I can relax and put the world away for a few precious moments. It’s the most beautiful place. The water is so blue and the red cliffs rising up to greet you as you drive into their welcoming arms. As you speed along in the boat just feeling the wind going through your hair and its wonderful! You can almost feel..... Well you almost don’t feel anything at all. It’s like the world can't reach you there.
That how I always felt when I went with my family. But now that my parents are dead, well I don’t go anymore. It inflicts too many painful memories. Here I am dressed in black again for another loved ones funeral. My grandmother was lying in her coffin looking as peaceful as I have ever seen her. I hate viewings. They dress you up when you’re dead. Make you all pretty. I wonder if it’s just so you can get into heaven. I don’t think god would mind if you were ugly or if you were a gorgeous film star.
My Grandmother had been taking care of me and my little brother since our parents died. She was the only family we had. My family had slowly been dying off. First it was my grandfather. He had a deadly peanut allergy. If he even had a whiff he would go into hives. My grandmother always carried insulin shots with her. At a restaurant one night the cook messed up the order and my grandfather took a bite and then all the sudden looked very uncomfortable and then took a drink of water but then he started turning purple and doubled over gasping. My grandmother realized what was happening but when she looked in her purse the insulin wasn’t there. She called an ambulance but by the time they got there he was already dead.
They police still say it was an accident. But I don’t believe them. I know it was on purpose, but I don’t know why. My grandfather had retired when he was 60 and wouldn’t ever say what he did for his work. He always told us he would tell us when we were old enough. He had always been mysterious, He and my grandma both, evading certain questions, changing the topic when my parents were mentioned. They always had a sort of protectiveness, and mysteriousness about them.
As all of this was going through my head as I looked at my grandmother in her silent coffin replaying the words she had said before she died. She told me as she was lying on her hospitable bed, “ Cameron, when you get home, I want you to go up to the attic. You will find a truck up there. In the trunk here is a false bottom. Pull it up and look at the papers underneath it. I have hidden some information for you and your brother. Only use it you have to . it also explains some things.” This was strange. My grandmother was always honest and she never called me Cameron she always called me cam. Something was wrong but I couldn’t put my finger on it.
As I was pondering what this meant my brother Collin caught my eye. He’s 14 and already he was strong and starting to fill out his t-shirts. He looked so handsome in his black suit. And all of the sudden looking at him, I was a little bit breathless. He was the spitting image of my dad. He gave me a funny look when he saw me staring, and I quickly composed myself. He came over to me, and whispered so only I could hear, “Can we leave soon Cam? I’m getting tired.” He wasn’t sounding tired at all but I knew better than to say anything. Funerals drained us both. “Ya I’ll let Jen know we’re leaving”, I said. Jen was an old family friend and had been with us for as long as I can remember. She and her husband Kirt had been coming over to my parent’s house for so long, I can’t remember when they started. Kirt was always hanging around and doing stuff around my parent’s yard and house. He was our handy man. When my parents had died he had taken it hard. Both Jen and Kirt had. They were always worried about us, always wanting to know if we needed anything. After Grandma died they offered to let me and kirt move in with them, but I polity refused. I don’t know why but my grandmother had given everything to my brother and I. We had gotten her house her cat, everything. I didn’t understand it but I never did understand my grandmother.
I went over to Jen and explained that Collin and I were tired and were going back to Grandma’s House. She was concerned, “if you wait a little longer Kirt can drive you home” she said “no need to run off now”. “I brought my own car remember?” I said. She had no response. She sighed and then nodded. “We’ll check on you when we are done here”. “I know you will “I said, smiling.
I grabbed Collin and we went outside to my car. As we walked outside I noticed that there was a man leaning against my car. I was surprised, and wary. I had never seen this man before. He looked faintly dangerous. He was wearing black slacks, and a black suit jacket with a black shirt underneath. No tie. He had dark brown hair, and had dark brown eyes. If I hadn’t been so wary I probably would’ve been very flattered to have this handsome man leaning against my car. But I was way too paranoid for that.
“Hello Cameron” he said in a pleasant tenor voice. He nodded politely at Collin, who stiffened. He looked me square in the eyes. “I need you to do something for me”, he said smoothly. I was getting more anxious by the moment. But I didn’t show it in my face. My face was indifferent, blank. “Depends what it is” I said just as smoothly. He smiled, his teeth were white. Almost too white. “Your Grandmother had some papers in her possession. I need them. They contain valuable information.” His eyes narrowed. “Do you know the papers I’m talking about?” he said. “Sorry I don’t believe I do”, I lied smoothly. Collin knew enough to keep quiet. His face showed surprise. “You’re sure? I wouldn’t want anything to happen to Jen or Kirt, if I find out you’re lying?” My breath Caught in my throat. I couldn’t let them get hurt. He must have seen the uncertainty in my eyes. “That’s it” he said. He smiled again. “I’ll be by tomorrow to pick up those papers. Goodbye Cameron.” He said, and then walked away. I watched him go. He got into a black Mercedes with tinted windows, and drove away.
My pulse was racing. What was I going to do?
Prologue (edited)
Here I am dress in black for another funeral. This time it was my grandmothers. She’s in her coffin looking as peaceful as I have ever seen her before.
I hate funerals, but I especially hate viewings. The people being viewed are always in heir nicest clothes, and have been all dolled up for the occasion. When I was little I always you had to be all pretty to get into heaven. Now I know better. I don’t think God would mind so much if you were ugly or beautiful.
My grandmother had been taking care of my little brother, Collin, and I since our parents died in a car crash a little over a year ago. I had been sixteen at the time. It was hard on me, but especially so on Collin. He had been fifteen at the time and when they died he hadn’t been the nicest child ever. He soon regretted his moodiness. Now he’s changed. He’s more solemn and withdrawn. I worry about him sometimes. As I’m looking over at him now and noticing how nice he looks in his black suit. He has really grown up. Physically and emotionally. He gives me a quick puzzled look, but keeps on talking to some friend of grandma’s.
Grandma, dear grandma. She had suddenly had a heart attack, and gone to the hospital. She was dying, and she knew it. The doctor told us that she had already made her funeral arrangements, and completed her will. The doctor said her lawyer would contact us soon. The lawyers name was John Snoot. I felt bad for the guy truly I did. Can you imagine having the last name Snoot? He showed us her will. Collin and I were shocked. “Whoa” was all Collin could say. I just stared at it. My Grandmother, had given us everything, from her cat to the house.